Eli’s Confession

25 Oct

I said your name aloud today.

After weeks and months and years.

It stumbled out stiltedly, the awkward syllables elbowing each other in an upward bound elevator; and as it floated away into the ether, I stared after it like I would a stranger, barely able to recognize the word I had once passionately moaned.

10 Responses to “Eli’s Confession”

  1. M4 October 25, 2008 at 11:35 am #

    Breath-taking!

  2. D October 25, 2008 at 4:12 pm #

    Love the metaphor of the name as a stranger.

  3. Aunty G October 25, 2008 at 5:34 pm #

    Moan
    Groan
    Ether
    Wither
    Blown!

  4. Nino's Mum October 27, 2008 at 3:50 pm #

    beautifully written.

  5. neha October 27, 2008 at 8:29 pm #

    Love it.

  6. CrazyDiamond October 28, 2008 at 8:08 pm #

    nice nice nice.

  7. Megha October 29, 2008 at 8:04 pm #

    Lovely!

  8. Orange Jammies October 30, 2008 at 1:17 am #

    M4: Who would you pick to give you CPR? 😉

    D: Words become people. At least on the planet I inhabit. 🙂

    Aunty G: From 5 lines to 5 words… oh what I have reduced you to. 😦

    Nino’s Mum: Glad you think so.

    Neha: Thanks.

    CrazyDiamond: You shine on too.

    Megha: Hello and welcome. 🙂

  9. maidinmalaysia November 25, 2008 at 10:09 am #

    Blown away
    What else do I have to say

  10. Orange Jammies November 25, 2008 at 9:56 pm #

    maidinmalaysia: You’ve been quite complimentary already. 🙂 Thank you.

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